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The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of visitors to four international museums from 1980 to 2015. Each point represents two
million
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people
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 intervals for the particular year, and there are several key features which are set out below.
First,
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there was one international
museum
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 that experienced an upward
trend
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.
Vatican
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The Vatican
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museum
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Museum
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 started
at
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apply
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five
million
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people
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 in 1980 and ended with nine
million
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people
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 in 2015, making
Vatican
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the Vatican
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 one of the most visited
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museum
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museums
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.
Second,
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there was one international
museum
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 that experienced a downward
trend
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. London Science
Museum
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 started at four
million
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people
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at
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in
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 1980 and it decreased to two
million
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people
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at
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in
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 2015.
Lastly
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, there were two international
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museum
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museums
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 that experienced a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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trend
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. Shenzhen visitors started at three
million
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people
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 and went up to four
million
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people
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. The second
museum
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 that experienced
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated
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fluctuating
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trend
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 is
Louvre
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the Louvre
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museum
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Museum
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, which started
at
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with
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 eight
million
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people
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 and ended with nine
million
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people
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. In conclusion, throughout the
35 years
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35-year
 period, Louvre and Vatican
museums
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 had the most visitors compared to other international museums.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, people, museum, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • visitor numbers
  • trend analysis
  • stability
  • popularity
  • significant changes
  • peak periods
  • low points
  • global tourism trends
  • economic downturns
  • natural disasters
  • tourist patterns
  • dynamic nature
  • factors influencing
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