The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the number of visitors to four international museums from 1980 to 2015. Each point represents two
million
people
intervals for the particular year, and there are several key features which are set out below.
First,
there was one international museum
that experienced an upward trend
. Vatican
Correct article usage
The Vatican
museum
started Capitalize word
Museum
at
five Change preposition
apply
million
people
in 1980 and ended with nine million
people
in 2015, making Vatican
one of the most visited Correct article usage
the Vatican
museum
.
Fix the agreement mistake
museums
Second,
there was one international museum
that experienced a downward trend
. London Science Museum
started at four million
people
at
1980 and it decreased to two Change preposition
in
million
people
at
2015.
Change preposition
in
Lastly
, there were two international museum
that experienced a Change to a plural noun
museums
fluctuated
Replace the word
fluctuating
trend
. Shenzhen visitors started at three million
people
and went up to four million
people
. The second museum
that experienced Correct article usage
a fluctuated
fluctuated
Wrong verb form
fluctuating
trend
is Louvre
Correct article usage
the Louvre
museum
, which started Capitalize word
Museum
at
eight Change preposition
with
million
people
and ended with nine million
people
.
In conclusion, throughout the 35 years
period, Louvre and Vatican Correct your spelling
35-year
museums
had the most visitors compared to other international museums.Capitalize word
Museums
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, people, museum, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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