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Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Keeping pets has caught a lot of people's attention which
make
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 them think that
animals
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 will outrageously impact
children
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's health and safety. In my view, having pets will bring more problematic issues for some reasons which will be discussed below.
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 with, people think that keeping
animals
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 can put them in danger. They are creatures that cannot be controlled based on what people want them to do. They will obviously be able to attack
children
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 how the household takes care of the pet. Second of all, they could be harmful causing the
children
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 to be infected by viruses
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animals
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' diseases especially when they have not taken any injections that are supposed to be given to them.
On the other hand
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, they are usually able to take really good care of
children
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 since they are able to read feelings.
Animals
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,
such
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 as dogs which are mammals usually do not cause any harm to them. It usually just wants to have fun and play around with
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them.
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 to some extent, they protect
children
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 from any dangerous situation. Taking everything into consideration, keeping pets may have
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a negative
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 impact,
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however
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 it
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 has some
postive
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positive
impact
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such
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 as protecting
children
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 from any harmful circumstances and
accompany
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accompanying
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the
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them
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 to play and have fun.

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Task achievement
Make sure to clearly express your opinion in the introduction and conclusion. Use phrases like 'In my opinion...' or 'I believe that...' for clarity.
Coherence and cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow between ideas and paragraphs to enhance coherence. Consider using transitional phrases to help guide the reader.
Task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention how certain pets have been known to positively impact a child's development or provide safety.
Task achievement
Your essay presents both sides of the argument, which is a good approach for this type of question.
Task achievement
You’ve identified potential dangers related to keeping pets, providing a balance of perspectives in your discussion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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