The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
map
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illustrates the layout of the
museum
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in 1998 and its modification in the year 2008, ten years later.
Overall
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, the
map
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depicts significant changes in the area, highlighting the development of a café seating area, a temporary exhibition room, and a restaurant.
Initially
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, the
map
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shows a café in the northern part, a fairly large empty garden in the middle of the
museum
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, and an entrance on the opposite side.
In contrast
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, the modified
map
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reveals several changes, including the addition of a restaurant next to the café,
while
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relocating the WC adjacent to the eating and drinking halls, making it more convenient. One notable change is the transfer of the storage room, designated for hanging clothes and bags, to a location next to the shop.
This
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makes it more accessible for customers with shopping bags who want to store their belongings before going to eat or visit the
museum
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. Another significant alteration is the addition of a fountain and a café seating area in the garden, enhancing the
overall
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experience for visitors. These changes make the
museum
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more enjoyable and appealing, providing a more engaging and relaxing environment for those who come to explore.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words map, museum, café with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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