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the table below give information about sales for fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five european countries

the table below give information about sales for fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1994 and 2004 in five european countries
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The given illustrations depict information on the quantity of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas sold in the UK,
Switzerland
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,
Denmark
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, Belgium and
Sweden
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 between 1999 and 2004.
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, the
sale
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 figures for both items increased for all the countries across the 5-year period, except for
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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, where banana sales declined in numbers.
Switzerland
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 continued to be the highest seller of
banana
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bananas
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 in both
the
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years. A detailed examination of the first table reveals that in 1999,
Switzerland
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 and
Denmark
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 were among the top sellers of coffee, at 3
million
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euros
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 and 1.5
million
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euros
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, respectively.
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,
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 was predominantly overtaken by the UK and Belgium, which experienced a remarkable surge, escalating by a factor of more than 13, from 1.5
million
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euros
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in to
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 20
million
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euros
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, and 1
million
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euros
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 to 17
million
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euros
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, respectively, over
this
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 period.
Switzerland
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 and
Denmark
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 saw a comparatively moderate growth of around double
of
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the numbers in 1999( 6
million
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euros
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 vs 2
million
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euros
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).
Sweden
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 continued to be the lowest seller across the period, increasing merely by 0.2
million
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euros
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. In the second table, which shares data about banana sales, it is notable that
Switzerland
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was
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 the highest numbers across the years, increasing from 15
million
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euros
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 in 1999, to nearly thrice
of
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that in 2004, maintaining
the
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 dominance. Contrarily, the next two biggest sellers in 1999,
Sweden
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 and
Denmark
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, dropped their sales in 2004, with a difference of approximately 1
million
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euros
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, pushing them to the bottom of the list. The UK and Belgium,
on the other hand
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, went from the lowest sellers at 1 and 0.6
million
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euros
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, respectively, in 1999, to more than 5 times these values in 2004(5.5 vs 4), positioning them in the top 3.
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