Some people believe that the only purpose for anyone to learn a second language is to travel or work abroad. Others argue that this is not the only purpose why someone needs to learn a second language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

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Some argue that the only reason for anybody to learn
new
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language
is to travel
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another country to work or study,
while
others claim that there is another purpose to learn a second
language
.
However
, in
this
essay, I will discuss both perspectives and provide my own opinion. On the one hand, learning
languages
by anyone can
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him many advantages.
Firstly
, learning another
language
can help him in his studies and expand his knowledge, as he will read
eassies
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essays
and books in different
langauges
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languages
.
Secondly
, he will explore another culture because the
language
always
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tells
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a lot about people who speak
this
language
,
additionally
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he can be connected with other people
easliy
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easily
and have many friends.
For example
, I learned
english
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while
I was young, it
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helped me with my study
,
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because if I didn't find materials for my field in my first
language
, I searched in
this
language
and had a lot of resources.
On the other hand
,
people
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for people
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who learning
another
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another language
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languages
it can help them
for traveling
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to travel
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abroad to work or to continue their studies, it can be the only reason for them, but it
didn't
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mean that learning
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seconde
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second
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language
didn't
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help.
For instance
, my brother learned
germany
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German
to travel in German for
working
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,
while
I had learned it just for fun, and to read more books in
this
language
.
Therefore
, everyone can
had
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his own reason why he wants to learn new
languages
. In conclusion, learning
languages
has many advantages and it can help for travel to
others
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countries or just for fun, but it always can help the person and gives him many chances.
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coherence cohesion
Focus on improving the logical flow between paragraphs. For example, use linking words or phrases to better connect ideas and arguments presented.
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Take time to expand on your ideas and ensure they are fully developed. Consider elaborating a bit more to prevent minor misunderstandings or confusion.
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coherence cohesion
You have successfully included an introduction and a conclusion in your essay, which adds clarity and helps in understanding your stance.
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You presented both views on the topic and clearly referenced personal examples, which strengthen your argumentation.
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