Some people think competitive sports have a good impact on the individual and society. Others think it has negative impact. Discuss both views and give your opiniion

In my
opinion
, yes, competitive sports have a positive
impact
on
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individuals
, I have no doubt. I can not say what
impact
it has on
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society I do not think, that there is some bad
impact
, but
anyway
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I
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will
try to explain my
opinion
and discuss both views.
Firstly
, competitive sports improve your
abillity
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ability
to fight for a good spot in
this
life
,
that is
the main advantage of that I think, because
life
is
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always
a fight for a job position and basically for your interests, in
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or another.
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Definitely
, those people who
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some competitive sports in their childhood
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become
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much stronger and more ready for
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adult
life
,
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than those who did not. In
this
case, I think chess
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is a perfect example when it is not
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dangerous
I mean you
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to be
ingured
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injured
insured
, but
that is
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perfect
for your conflict power.
Also
, it is good for
consintration
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concentration
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ability
to go through
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troubles
.
Also
, it is similar
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I noted before, I would say that
,
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life
is always the conflict and you will have a lot of situations when you should be ready for it and cope with it. About a positive
impact
, I would say that it is a good thing if you are a
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professional
sportsman and
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represent
your country on a
high level
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cometitions
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competitions
competition
, I mean international one,
for
example
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Olympic
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games. In
this
case, yes,
that
is
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a positive
impact
for
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a
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society. Another thing, and what is
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negative issue in my
opinion
,
it
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is
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inspire
inspired
people to be more
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attractive
abrasive
in
life
. In
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conclusion
, I guess I have enough reasons why I think so and explained my
opinion
in a clear way.
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task achievement
Focus on clearly defining both views before presenting your opinion. Ensure that each paragraph directly supports your thesis statement.
coherence cohesion
Use topic sentences to clearly present each main point, and maintain a logical flow with transitional phrases.
task achievement
Good attempt at presenting both sides of the argument and including personal opinion in the essay.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion sections that outline and summarize the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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