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In many countries today parents are able to choose to send their children to single- sex schools or co- educational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, parents prefer sending their kids to same-sex or mixed-sex
schools
. Some of them say that if children go to single-sex
schools
, it will be a disadvantage in later
life
. In my opinion, I can neither agree nor disagree with the statement for various reasons, which I am going to discuss in
further
 paragraphs. I partly agree with the statement that co-ed
schools
 provide better preparation
in
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life
 for kids.
Moreover
, the interaction they allow for the opposite gender can help the kid to develop their emotional intelligence and interpersonal relationships.
However
, co-ed
schools
also
 play a role in building confidence and
communicational
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 skills which are important skills for later in
life
.
For example
, the researchers at Oxford say that emotional intelligence
is mainly develop
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 throughout the school years of a person's
life
.
On the other hand
, we can't deny that
the
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single-sex
schools
 do provide merits on some basis.
Furthermore
, co-ed
schools
 provide a comfortable and relaxed learning environment as everyone shares the same temperament as the same gender.
Besides
, it reduces the stereotypes and double standards, allowing them to focus more on their studies.
For instance
, research from Cambridge provides studies that, same-sex
schools
 outperformed their co-ed academic mate by 40-50% in grades. In conclusion, both academics have their own merits and play significant roles in their interpersonal and psychological development for better performance and enhanced confidence throughout learning days.
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task achievement
Consider using more specific examples or studies to substantiate each of your points, which will make your argument more compelling.
coherence cohesion
You can enhance coherence by ensuring that each paragraph clearly relates to your overall opinion or thesis statement.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly states a balanced view and provides a roadmap for the essay.
task achievement
You effectively discuss both sides of the argument, providing a balanced view on the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay features a clear introduction and a well-structured conclusion that summarizes the main points discussed.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-sex school
  • co-educational school
  • interpersonal skills
  • reinforce gender stereotypes
  • gender-specific learning needs
  • academic performance
  • diverse perspectives
  • real-world scenarios
  • healthy competition
  • mutual respect
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