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The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts show the percentage of pollutants entering a particular part of ocean in 1997 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate The proportion of
pollutatns
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pollutants
pollutant
 which entered
in
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specific parts of
ocean
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the ocean
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 from 7
diffrent
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different
source
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sources
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, air, litter, farm waste, industrial waste, marine, offshore oil,
domestic
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and domestic
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 sewage, in 1997 and 2007.
Overall
, It can be seen that the Most
pullutants
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pollutants
 came from air in both years. It stayed
steadily
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 over
the
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apply
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time, accounting for around 30
percent
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per cent
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. It followed by the portion of marine trash in 1997,
while
 the rate of domestic sewage followed pollutants from
air
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the air
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 in 2007. Looking at the graph more closely,
It is clear that
 the domestic sewage and offshore oil increased over the year compared to litter and marine rubbish decreased slightly over the period.
Besides
, The rate of
Industial
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Industrial
 waste dropped dramatically from 17
percent
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per cent
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 in 1997 to 9
percent
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per cent
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 in 2007. It
cut
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was cut
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by
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in
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 halves throughout the period.
Moreover
,
Other
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Another
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 notable feature is the percentage of litter rubbish in 2007, reporting 0
percent
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per cent
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.
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