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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002. Summurise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisonswhere relevant.

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The given table represents the data regarding consumer preferences
of
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 various sorts of goods in five countries during
the
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2002. Units are measured in percentages. From an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent, that people in all five countries spent most of their income on food, drinks and tobacco,
while
least
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 popular range was leisure and education. Turkey was the
leader
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 country in consumption of nutrition,
whereas
 in Spain leisure and education
was
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 just a tiny fraction.
To begin
with
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 people mostly
expend
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spend
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the
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money In Turkey
for
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on
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 food,
moreover
,
this
 country
have
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 had the highest index (32% )in
this
 range of expenditure . In comparison in
Sweden
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Sweden,
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this
 index was almost half of that (15,7%). Another notable trend can be seen for leisure and education, which are not so popular among all walks of life in all countries.
Country
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A country
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 with
highest
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 indicator is Turkey (4.35%),
while
in
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Spain it was purchased a very small proportion
near
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 2%. The
cloths
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clothes
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 segment mostly appealed
by
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 consumers in Italy almost 10%,
whereas
 in Sweden index was less
by
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 4% (5,40%).
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