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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The plans illustrate how Beechwood
Farm
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 has changed from 1950 to the present day.
Overall
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, the
farm
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 has become considerably more commercial and tourist-oriented,
while
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 still retaining much of its original agricultural function.
Body paragraph 1
In 1950, a large
area
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 on the northern side of the
farm
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 was used for grazing sheep, but
this
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 section has undergone substantial redevelopment since
then
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. A camping field, a parking
area
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 and solar panels have been introduced in
this
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 part of the site.
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, the southeastern section has experienced relatively few changes. The farmhouse and chicken
area
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 have remained in their original locations,
while
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 the former barn has been replaced by holiday cottages. A new, smaller barn has
also
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 been constructed near the vegetable plot.
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, the original tracks have been upgraded to roads, and a new route has been added to provide access to the barn.
Conclusion
Finally
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, the areas devoted to fruit trees, soft fruits and vegetables have remained largely unchanged.
However
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, a
farm
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 shop has been added near the fruit-tree
area
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,
further
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 reflecting the
farm
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's shift towards commercial activities.

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task response
Give one or two more clear map details, such as where the new road leads or how the new parts are placed near each other. This would make the report more full.
task response
Be careful with words like “largely unchanged”. If an area has a new shop or a new barn near it, say clearly which part did not change and which part did.
coherence and cohesion
The order is clear: you start with the north, then move to the south-east, and then describe the growing areas. Keep using this map-based order.
coherence and cohesion
You could link the last paragraph more closely to the one before it. For example, say that the farm shop is another new business part of the site.
task response
You give a clear main view: the farm is now used more for visitors and business, but it still has farm work.
task response
You cover the key changes, including the camping field, car park, solar panels, holiday homes, new barn, roads and farm shop.
coherence and cohesion
The report has a strong opening, a clear overall statement, and well-ordered body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Words such as “By contrast”, “In addition” and “Finally” help the reader follow the changes easily.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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