More and more people are using mobile phones and the internet to communicate so people are losing the ability to have face-to-face conversations, to what extent do you agree or disagree?

People
do not communicate face-to-face,
therefore
, there is
lack
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a lack
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of depth in
communication
.
People
only exchange normal greetings via online
communication
. They do not share their personal feelings and sorrows. So, the bond which needs to be developed between
people
is not growing. A person has a lot of online friends,
however
, he actually does not have anyone to share his true feelings.
For example
, if someone is depressed or suicidal, he cannot not share
it
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his
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online
communication
with his friends, because he only shares greetings with them.
Moreover
, in
an
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online
communication
, there is no way to touch and hug
firends
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friends
. One of the important criteria of human
relationship
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relationships
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is having physical contact.
Communication
through the internet does not allow it.
Therefore
, friends only verbally
comminicate
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communicate
, and see each others' faces, but cannot touch each other. They do not get the true feeling of friendship.
For example
,
people
contact
with
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each other
through
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online but they cannot touch each other.
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You have identfied key issues related to communication depth and physical interaction.
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The essay contains relevant examples, such as the example of online friendships lacking depth.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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