The bar charts below show the prevelance of obesity among boys and girls aged 12-19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014

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The presented bar charts compare data about the percentage of teenagers of both sexes who had weighting in the USA from various ethnicities in 2 different times namely, 2004 and 2014.

Overall

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, it was important that the proportion of people who had obesties increase over the period of 10 years;

moreover

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this

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fraction for boys was higher than for girls.

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the boys' diagram, Hispanics, the main group who had a lot of obese boys, hit 13% in 2004;

then

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it climbed significantly to 27% in 2014.

Non-Hispanic

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whites, the second one in 2004, did not change a lot owing to the fact that it scored 12% in 2004;

thereafter

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, its portion of 5% jumped in 2014. In the beginning,

non-Hispanic

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blacks reached 11%;

furthermore

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, it grew moderately to one-fifth. The girls' graph presents information that

in contrast

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to the prior chart

Non-Hispanic

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blacks had the maximum fraction. It was 16% at the start after that it leapt considerably to 29% in 2014. Later Hispanic and

non-Hispanic

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whites hit 12% and 9% in 2004;

additionally

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, their percentage of 5% rose in 2014.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words non-hispanic with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

183 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

prevalence
ethnicity
obesity rates
gender comparison
ethnic disparities
socio-economic factors
cultural factors
environmental factors
long-term health consequences
healthcare systems
government policies
community programs
adolescents
trend analysis

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The bar charts below show the prevelance of obesity among boys and girls aged 12-19 years by ethnicity, in the United States for the years 2004 and 2014

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