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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph describes the
percentage
 of people in four Asian countries who were living in cities from 1970 to 2020,
along with
 the projections for 2030 and 2040. In 1970,
both
 Malaysia and
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had about 30% of their population living in cities. Malaysia
then
 experienced substantial growth throughout the following
years
 with roughly 70% of its population living in the city in 2020;
while
,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 fluctuated
in
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from
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 1980 to 2010 at around 35% and 40% before it increased again in 2020.
On the other hand
, Indonesia and
Thailand
 had only around 15% of its residents living in the city back in 1970.
However
,
both
 countries’ percentages kept increasing and never saw a decrease. In 2000,
both
 Indonesia and
Thailand
 had the same
percentage
 at about 25%. Over the
years
, Indonesia’s
percentage
 grew significantly and ended up in second place in 2020, surpassing
both
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and
Thailand
.
Overall
, all four countries had an increase within those 50
years
 and are expected to keep increasing in the following
years
.
With
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Malaysia
having
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has
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 the highest
percentage
, followed by Indonesia,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, and
Thailand
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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