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Some people feel that it will be better for society and individuals if driverless cars are widely used. Others are not in favour of the same. Discuss both the point of views and give your opinion.

#people #society #individuals #driverless #cars #favour #point
In
this
technology
 era, every individual wants to use all new gadgets and
electronics
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equipments
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. Few individuals
says
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 that
driverless
cars
 are far
more
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better for society and
people
Whereas
 others disagree with
this
 point of view. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both
the
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views.
In
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 the one hand, the first and foremost benefit of
driverless
cars
 is time consuming. In detail,
people
 nowadays
thinks
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 that it is a
wastage
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 of time if they are going with someone who
don'
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t
 know how to drive.
This
 is a total waste of
tims
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time
 for that person. If
,
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person
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a person
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 doesn'
t
 know to drive
the
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car
 but
car
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the car
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 is
driverless
 it is very easy for them,
they
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 don'
t
 have to depend on others.
As well as
,
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 accident
level
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 can
also
 be decreased if
driverless
cars
running
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everyday
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.
For example
, there is no distraction
for
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technology
, it runs on command. There
is
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 no emotions, so
this
 decreases the level of accidents.
However
, automatic
cars
 have some disadvantages that's why
people
 don'
t
 want to use them regular basis. The first is accuracy, automatic
cars
 run on
road
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the road
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with
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 any security.
Its
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 not accurate for daily travelling,
on
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 traffic road jams it is very risky with
these
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technology
equipments
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equipment
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.Another reason is that
,
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technology
 is not
trustable
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items
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item
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.
For instance
, if one person is going in
driverless
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a driverless
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car
 and
car
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the car
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 just
stopped
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 without any flashers and any lights it
was cause
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causes
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 accidents. In conclusion, automatic
cars
 are
usefull
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useful
 for emergency
works
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work
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 and for
people
 who don'
t
 know how to drive and somewhere
this
technology
 can be harmful at some points.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. **Autonomous Vehicles** - A term referring to driverless or self-driving cars.
  • 2. **Human Error** - Mistakes made by people while driving, often leading to accidents.
  • 3. **Traffic Congestion** - Overcrowded roadways, often resulting in slower movement.
  • 4. **Mobility Solutions** - Transportation options for individuals who have difficulty moving around.
  • 5. **Emissions** - Pollutants released into the air by vehicles.
  • 6. **Technical Reliability** - The dependability of the technology to function as intended.
  • 7. **Job Displacement** - The loss of jobs due to new technology or automation.
  • 8. **Cyber-attacks** - Attempts by hackers to gain unauthorized access to computerized systems.
  • 9. **Liability** - Legal responsibility for something, often in the context of accidents or damages.
  • 10. **Ethical Considerations** - Moral issues that arise regarding the fairness and implications of decisions.
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