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A museum near your house is looking for people to do part-time vountary/unpaid work. you would like to do some voulntary work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for voluntary work in letter. explain why you want to do voluntary work at museum. describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work.

#museum #house #people #vountary #work #voulntary #director #skills #qualities
Dear Sir/Madam I hope
this
 letter
find
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 you well . I am writing
this
 letter to express my interest in working
as
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part-time in
museum
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a museum
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in
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next month as I
seen
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 your advertisement
in
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last
 day. Well, if I talk about my
skill
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 I have five years of experience as a general
labour
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labourer
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 and have basic skills
of
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 construction activities
such
 as concreting and plumbing .
Subsquently
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Subsequently
,
this
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 skills might help me to
work
 in
museum
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the museum
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 because I have seen construction
work
is
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going
in
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Museum
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museums
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.
Furthermore
, If you find
suitable
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 for
this
work
 I can start my
work
 from
first
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dayof
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day of
 next month. yours Sincerely, Navdeep
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writing accuracy
Improve spelling accuracy, such as 'vountary' should be 'voluntary' and 'Subsquently' should be 'Subsequently'.
task achievement
Elaborate more on why you are interested in voluntary work at the museum for a richer response.
coherence cohesion
Good structure with clear opening, body, and closing sections.
task achievement
The letter uses a polite and formal tone, suitable for addressing a director.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time volunteer
  • cultural heritage
  • community engagement
  • museum curator
  • customer liaison
  • public speaking
  • team collaboration
  • scheduling availability
  • artifact preservation
  • educational workshops
  • multilingual communication
  • curatorial assistance
  • event coordination
  • visitor services
  • exhibit maintenance
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