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Some people believe that the only purpose for anyone to learn a second language is to travel or work abroad. Others argue that this is not the only reason why someone needs to learn a second language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

#people #purpose #anyone #second #language #travel #work #reason #someone
More and more
people
 are inclined to study some new
languages
 and prosper.For some
people
,acquiring
new
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language
 assists in
traveling
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or succeeding in
working
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the working
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 sphere.Meanwhile, others claim that
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the competence
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of
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 investigating a second
language
 boosts their personality evolvement.From my perspective,there are diverse purposes for deeply studying foreign
languages
,which valuably
effects
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on
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people
's mindset.
To begin
 with,a lot of
people
 study another
language
besides
 their mother tongue when they find themselves being in
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 of it or finding a necessity.
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also
 can create a readiness or assist in
a random situations
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random situations
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.
For example
,in other
country
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countries
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people
 can face
with
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difficulties that are strange for them and their knowledge
in
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of
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 other
languages
 can
make
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help
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 them
to
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overcome the situation easily.
Moreover
,
traveling
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travelling
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 and developing communicative skills with locals creates self-confidence.
Along with
this
 aspect,learning other
languages
 can create a greater opportunity to become self-developed.Knowing
other
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another language
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language
, can facilitate
in
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the environment and lead to being multiple developed.
For instance
,daily activities can partly cause their effect of enriching knowledge.
As a result
,there can be
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 fundamental reason
of
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 being involved in it.
To sum up
,there can be many reasons to study a new
language
besides
 working or
traveling
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travelling
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.During
people
’s
lifestyle
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lifestyle,
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 they keep using them in different situations.
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Good effort in presenting both perspectives regarding the learning of a second language.
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