Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today's society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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with fake and evasive offers. As
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some
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are usually misleading and catchy, I believe that
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frequently use marketing catches
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, by promoting false goods that
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not even match with ordered
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dyed items and charismatic presentation, namely are
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popular tricks that companies use for increasing sales and
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can lead to
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of money on
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of time in it , as well.
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,
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help companies to find
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versa. Through
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can find valuable items, drugs
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or even revenues.
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, for companies it provides them
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to represent their
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goods to the public,
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helping for boosting their reputation and wealth. Most influenced and eminent brands namely , had not
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that level as they are now, without revealing their things to the world.
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more versatile way. In conclusion, regardless
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fascinating features and artificial expressions, I partially agree with
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language
Work on using more precise vocabulary and grammar structures to effectively convey your ideas. Avoid informal language like "rizz up" and ensure you are using the correct forms of words, such as 'advertising' instead of 'advertisement' in certain contexts.
task response
The essay lacks specific examples that could support your points more effectively. Consider including 2-3 specific ads that illustrate both sides of your argument.
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The essay’s points on advertising's benefits and drawbacks need more development. Further elaborate on each argument to ensure a clearer and more comprehensive analysis.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure every paragraph clearly supports either the overall argument or showcases an alternative viewpoint. Currently, some paragraphs contain ambiguous phrasing that could benefit from stronger topic sentences to guide the reader.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction sets the context well and presents a clear plan to discuss both sides of the argument, pointing towards a structured essay.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion offers a clear closing opinion, aligning with the introduction’s proposed balance in the debate on advertising’s roles.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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