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Some people think that scientists experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for Human's life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some people believe that science experimenting with
animals
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 in a laboratory is the only option to guarantee new products that will be safe for
humans
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. I completely agree with
this
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 viewpoint because there are a large number of
animals
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 available in
environment
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, and they should be utilized to serve
humans
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 because they are
the
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superior to all
animals
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. There are a large number of
animals
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 in
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
, and
scientists
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 can use them to
experiment
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new
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with new
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 products in a laboratory. They can be utilized to know
that
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whether the new products are suitable for human use or not. There are so many species in
environment
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,
therefore
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, if one
experiment
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 with one species fails,
scientists
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 can go for another animal.
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, in the UK, in 2023,
scientists
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 at
first,
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made an
experiment
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 of cancer medication on monkeys, and that
experiment
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 went
worng
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wrong
.
Then
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 they experimented on rabbits, and that was successful.
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,
humans
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 are superior to all creatures, and
animals
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 can be sacrificed to save their lives. Human
life
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 is very valuable, and only
human
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humans
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 can protect
this
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 earth. To continue
the
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human civilization, animal testing is the only option. If any product without testing on
animals
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utilized
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is utilized
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 by
humans
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, that might be a threat to human
life
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.
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, in the USA,
scientists
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 without testing on
animals
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 once applied one medicine
on
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to
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 a human, and that person eventually died because it had harmful elements which were detrimental to human
life
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.
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, human
life
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 is very precious, and
animals
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 can be utilized to
experiment
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any
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 product for the survival of
humans
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. There are a large number of
animals
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 available in nature, and
scientists
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 can use them for experimentation.
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task achievement
To improve your task response, consider addressing the complexities of the topic, such as ethical considerations and alternative methods to animal testing.
coherence cohesion
For better coherence and cohesion, try to use a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Your essay successfully includes both an introduction and a conclusion, which clearly present and summarize your stance on the topic.
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You provided relevant examples to support your main points, making the argument more compelling and grounded.
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