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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates how many
females
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 and males pursued
a
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further
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education
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, and if they were studying full-time or part-time, in three different periods in the UK.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of women that got into a full-time
further
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study
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 increased in each period given,
while
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 the
number
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 of
men
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 had some minor fluctuations.
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, the amount of women who were in a part-time
education
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also
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 grew gradually, and the same for the
number
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 of
men
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. In 1970/71, around 700
thousand
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females
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 pursued a full-time
further
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education
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,
however
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, 100
thousand
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 of them were in a part-time
high
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higher
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education
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.
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, exactly 800
thousand
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females
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 went to a higher
education
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 with a higher
study
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 in 1980/81,
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, around 200
thousand
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 of those
females
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 pursued a part-time
education
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. And in 1990/91, about 1000,000 got a full-time higher
education
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,
while
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 only 200,000 did a part-time For males, in 1970/71,1000
thousand
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 got a full-time
further
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study
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,
while
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 around 150
thousand
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 were in a part-time
further
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education
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.
Moreover
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, 800
thousand
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men
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 had a full-time
study
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 in 1880/81.
On the other hand
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, just under 200
thousand
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 males had a part-time
study
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 in higher
education
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.
Additionally
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, in the years 1990/91, the
number
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 of
men
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 in
the
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full-time
study
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 increased and reached 900
thousand
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.
In contrast
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, 200
thousand
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 of them had a part-time
further
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study
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, in contrast, moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, education, number, study, men, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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