The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates how many
females
and males pursued
a
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further
education
, and if they were studying full-time or part-time, in three different periods in the UK.
Overall
, the
number
of women that got into a full-time
further
study
increased in each period given,
while
the
number
of
men
had some minor fluctuations.
Moreover
, the amount of women who were in a part-time
education
also
grew gradually, and the same for the
number
of
men
. In 1970/71, around 700
thousand
females
pursued a full-time
further
education
,
however
, 100
thousand
of them were in a part-time
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education
.
Furthermore
, exactly 800
thousand
females
went to a higher
education
with a higher
study
in 1980/81,
in contrast
, around 200
thousand
of those
females
pursued a part-time
education
. And in 1990/91, about 1000,000 got a full-time higher
education
,
while
only 200,000 did a part-time For males, in 1970/71,1000
thousand
got a full-time
further
study
,
while
around 150
thousand
were in a part-time
further
education
.
Moreover
, 800
thousand
men
had a full-time
study
in 1880/81.
On the other hand
, just under 200
thousand
males had a part-time
study
in higher
education
.
Additionally
, in the years 1990/91, the
number
of
men
in
the
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full-time
study
increased and reached 900
thousand
.
In contrast
, 200
thousand
of them had a part-time
further
study
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words females, education, number, study, men, thousand with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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