some people opine that students are the best evaluator of teachers performance while other say that there are other ways to evaluate teachers performance. what is your view point. give reason and support yourself with example.

It is a debatable issue these days that offspring
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in mentor credibility and
therefore
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judgement on professor's ability
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there are some
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that there are other
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in checking
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.In the following paragraphs,
this
essay will elucidate both viewpoints
along with
my notion and example . To commence with, let us shed some light on the first viewpoint. first and foremost, when
individual
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study with
there
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teacher
they learn about their weakness and guide them properly with
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.
Subsequently
, when
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students
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pass the
exam
with good grades
thus
shows the
teacher
's efficiency and knowledge about studies.
For example
, Research conducted by The University of British Colombia in Canada ,in Surrey in the year 2012 claims that 80% of pupils achieved
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in
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with proper learning and training from
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at school.
On the other hand
, let us delve deeper into the other side of the argument.
Firstly
, we have seen in our life that some kids are not blessed with sharp memory even they are weak in learning so when they face the
exam
they often feel confident and can not even remember the studies which they did in past to pass the exams .
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and even in the worst situation their parent
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blaming
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the teacher
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for their
performance
.To cite an example, an article published by Benjamin Bradlee in The Washington Post "LEARNING" in the United States in year 2010 claims that 40% of
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lose their jobs when authorities start evaluating kid's
performance
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with their marks. To encapsulate , it can be considered that child achievement not only shows the efficiency of
teacher
's
performance
but at the
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same time
few students are genetically weak in learning which has a bad effect on
teacher
's evaluation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evaluate
  • performance
  • objective
  • bias
  • feedback
  • assessment
  • competencies
  • curriculum
  • methodologies
  • insight
  • engagement
  • clarity
  • holistic
  • charisma
  • standardized testing
  • educational experts
  • technology
  • observation
  • data analytics
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