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The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the cost of water in five cities in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the information about the
water
 charges in the five different cities of
the
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Australia. It
also
 tells their cost in dollars.
However
, the data in the table is examined in three
catagories
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categories
. The highest
billes
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bills
 of $332 per household, are recorded in Perth. There $0.42
are
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 charged for
water
 usage up to 123KL and $1.50 for over usage. The next in line is Sydney with $319 of
average
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the average
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 bill.
Therefore
, the ratio of cost is
same
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 in the city,
that
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 is $0.98. The city
Adelaide
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of Adelaide
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,
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 charges approximately $312 and Brisbane $310 yearly. The amount paid by inhabitants for up to 125KL of
water
,
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 is $0.42 in Adelaide and $0.81 in Brisbane.
However
,
cost
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 of
water
 for over 125KL
,
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 is about $1.00 in the first city and $0.84 in the other one. As far as
Malbourne
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Melbourne
 is concerned, the amount invested on
water
 yearly per household is around $253,
whereas
 the
ration
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ratio
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 of low
user
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users
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 and over is
same
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the same
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 which is $0.78.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cost of living
  • urban infrastructure
  • utility rates
  • supply and demand
  • metropolitan areas
  • water consumption
  • price variation
  • tariff systems
  • economic factors
  • budget allocation
  • household expenditure
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