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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999. Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The graph illustrates unemployment rates in the US and
Japan
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 between
March
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 1993 and
March
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 1999.
According to
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 the graph, It can be seen that the percentage of the workforce in the US was much higher than when it started,
March
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 1993, but it eventually dropped
at the end
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,
March
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 1999,
in contrast
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, to
Japan
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 which rose. At the beginning of
March
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 1993, The unemployment
rate
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 in the US started to rise to 7
while
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 in
Japan
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 the
rate
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 was not higher than 2.5. After that, the
rate
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 of the US seemed to fall each year, and In
March
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 1999, ultimately, the
rate
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 went down to almost 4.
On the other hand
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, the unemployment
rate
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 grew continuously to nearly 5 per cent in
March
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 1999. Both countries surprisingly had the same
rate
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 between
March
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 1998 to
March
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 1999 before the US decreased and
Japan
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,
however
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, increased.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, march, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • graph
  • trend
  • changes
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • findings
  • observations
  • data
  • statistics
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