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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the information about the changes in the
population
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 of two countries, Italy and Yemen, in 2000 and 2025. It
also
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 depicts the three groups of ages and
increase
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increases
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 and
decrease
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decreases
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 in their percentages as well. Moving to the Yamen, 46.3% of
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population
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the population
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 was comprised
by
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of
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 the age group of 15-59 in 2000, which will extend to 57.3% by the end of 2025.The other group of 0-14
years
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, was about 50.1% in 2000, but soon it will decrease to 37.0% in 2025.
Whereas
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, 60+
years
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 people, were 3.6% in 2000, but it will climb to 5.7% in 2025. As far as Italy is concerned, 61.6% of
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population
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the population
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 was occupied by 15-59
years
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 of residents in 2002. The country is trying to control its
population
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 and soon it will shrink to 46.2% in
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the comming
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comming
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coming
years
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. Even
age
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the age
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 group of 0-14 will
also
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 go down to 11.5% in 2025, which was 14.3%
in
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at
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 the beginning of 2000.
However
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, 60+
years
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 will rise to 42.3%, which was 24.1% in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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