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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart illustrates the information about the changes in the
population
 of two countries, Italy and Yemen, in 2000 and 2025. It
also
 depicts the three groups of ages and
increase
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increases
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 and
decrease
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decreases
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 in their percentages as well. Moving to the Yamen, 46.3% of
population
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the population
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 was comprised
by
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of
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 the age group of 15-59 in 2000, which will extend to 57.3% by the end of 2025.The other group of 0-14
years
, was about 50.1% in 2000, but soon it will decrease to 37.0% in 2025.
Whereas
, 60+
years
 people, were 3.6% in 2000, but it will climb to 5.7% in 2025. As far as Italy is concerned, 61.6% of
population
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the population
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 was occupied by 15-59
years
 of residents in 2002. The country is trying to control its
population
 and soon it will shrink to 46.2% in
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the comming
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comming
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coming
years
. Even
age
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the age
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 group of 0-14 will
also
 go down to 11.5% in 2025, which was 14.3%
in
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at
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 the beginning of 2000.
However
, 60+
years
 will rise to 42.3%, which was 24.1% in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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