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The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about the ratio of income to spending (in dollars) by Americans by age range in 2013. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram describes how much money was spent and earned in every
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group
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 in the United States in 2013. In overview, every
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group
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 of people's earnings were more than spending on average except for those who were under 25 and over 75. People aged from 35 to 54 made the most profit than any other
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 and the number was almost the same as 80000.
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, their expenditure to earnings had differences by probably 20000 dollars, which
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 belonged to considerably a big figure compared to other surplus of various
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 ranges. Following that, 55-64-year-old Americans had nearly 75000 income, their expenses were about 55000, and the revenue was roughly 20000.
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, middle-aged bodies (35-54, and 45-54) and a 55-64
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group
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 economized more income than others.
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, the youngest
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 held the lowest means with at most 29000 dollars in income and 30000 in expenditure, so the outcome was they lost money.
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, the elderly (plus 75) earned the equivalent profit as they consumed.
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