Problems with environmental pollution have become so serious that many countries are trying to solve these problems. discuss cause and effect and Suggest possible solutions and give your own opinion.

It is a matter of fact that in
this
contemporary world, individuals trying to invest
to clean
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their
surrounding
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surroundings
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to
dealt
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with the issues being caused by
pollution
. The essay will discuss possible reasons and negative
effect
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effects
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as well as
suggest some
remifications
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ramifications
. In my
opinion
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opinion,
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this
trend could
proves
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to be highly effective in making cities or regions better
place
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places
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to live if
peolpe
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people
begin making changes from their own home. Nowadays
due to
the technological world various
number of
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apply
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gadgets, automobiles, industries and harmful chemicals are being used in daily life. These are the things that cause air and land
pollutions
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pollution
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which could
effect
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affect
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the health and
wellbeing
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well-being
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of the citizens.
For example
, every family has combustion vehicles in the family which are
biggest
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source of
causing
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air and noise
pollution
.
Furthermore
, there are various possible solutions that could be beneficial in improving
flora
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the flora
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and fauna of the countries. First and foremost, there should be
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the implimentation
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implimentation
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implementation
of strict laws for flushing out the chemicals used in the factories
in
particular
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way
instead
of flushing
it
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them
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out in the oceans.
Secondly
, people could start car-pooling
while
going
on
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their jobs which would be
helpfull
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helpful
in reducing
polution
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pollution
.
For example
, in Delhi, India, there was
policy
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implyied
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impliedly
named
odd
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and
even
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to reduce traffic
pollution
and proved effective in improving the surroundings. In conclusion,
eventhough
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even though
there are plenty of
resons
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reasons
behind causing
pollution
still I strongly believe that working together as a citizen and government can highly impact to improve the environment.
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coherence cohesion
Clarify the reasons and effects of pollution early in the essay and ensure each point is fully explained and supported. You touch upon key issues, but the progression of ideas can be clearer with more detailed reasoning and examples.
writing mechanics
Proofread for minor language errors such as spelling and punctuation, which can detract from clarity. Consider varying sentence structures for better readability.
task achievement
You provide relevant examples, such as the odd and even policy in Delhi, which strengthens your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, and you clearly state your opinion on the matter.

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  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Renewable resources
  • Conservation
  • Sustainable development
  • Biodiversity
  • Pollutants
  • Toxic waste
  • Deforestation
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Fossil fuels
  • Alternative energy
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