The diagram below shows the process of recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. nb

The diagram below shows the process of recycling plastic bottles.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  nb
The diagram below illustrates the stages of recycling
plastic
bottles
.
Overall
, there are 9 steps in the diagram.
Also
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Also,
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there are many stages
such
as throwing
bottles
,
delivery
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delivering
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from the bin to the recycling centre, sorting, compressing, crushing, producing
plastic
bottles
, heating and
at the end
producing a new product. First of all, the people through the
plastic
bottles
to the bin and after that bin cars deliver to recycling centre. After delivered the workers will sort the
bottles
.
Then
they compress into blocks. When the
bottles
compresses
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compress
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into blocks they crush
that
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those
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bloks. After crushing, separated waste enters the water The next step producing
plastic
pallets after washing them.
Then
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The
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plastic
pallets heats to form row material. After will form a row
material
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of material
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. And
last
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the last
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stage is producing end products. All
this
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these
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stages have
own
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their own
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difficulties, but in the
end
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end,
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will produce a new product.
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