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The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The charts below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows that salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
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The pie chart depicts 6 distinct occupations of
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 students upon graduation from one University, and the table illustrates
such
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graduates
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' income from 3 different professions (freelance consultants, government sectors, and private companies) after 5 years of working. To commence, full-time workers predominate
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graduates
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, accounting for more than half of the total at 52%.
This
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 is followed by part-time employees and unemployed individuals with approximately 40% less compared to full-time work for each occupation, indicating a noticeable disparity.
However
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, those who are studying as full-time master students and the unknown categories are identical at 8%.
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, the percentage of part-time workers who pursue their master’s degree is considerably small, amounting to around ten times less than full-time work.
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, regarding
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graduates
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’ revenue after 5 years of working, the percentage of earners with the smallest range of salaries ($25,000 - $49,999) from 3 different occupations is 7%.
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,
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 with salaries ranging from $75,000 to $99,000 are around 35% on average.
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, the percentage of
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graduates
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 who are receiving more than $100,000 is approximately 40%. To encapsulate,
while
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 a substantial number of
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 degree holders engage in full-time work after graduation, these individuals receive mostly more than $100.000 from working in 3 different jobs.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words anthropology, graduates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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