The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The given chart illustrates a state's sales abroad in both 2015 and 2016, comparing the percentages of each sector.
Overall
, petroleum products were one of the most profitable.
Initially
, they were worth a little more than 60%, but in the end, their value slightly increased by a few points percentage. Engineered goods were the category which had showed the biggest difference, in fact, in 2015 they were at roughly 55%, but, later they reached more than 60%, equalizing the result of the previously mentioned product.
In contrast
, gems and jewellery started at approximately 43%, they were the only ones which had a drop by a small number of points percentages, getting closer to 40%. Regarding agricultural products, they did not have significant changes, showing an almost imperceptible rise but always staying close to 30%.
Lastly
, an improvement was made by the textiles sector, which started at 25% and finished at more than 30%.
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