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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employee rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Self-employee
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 is a contentious issue debate.
Wheras
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Whereas
 many people prefer to work for themselves rather than work for a certain company.
This
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 essay will examine some advantages and disadvantages of being
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self-employee
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a self-employee
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.
To begin
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 with, there are some advantages to
be
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being
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self-employeed
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self-employed
.
Firstly
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, flexible time, as an employee for
ownselft
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ownself
oneself
, someone has
fully
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full
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authorities
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authority
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 for the time
mangement
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management
 regardless obey some regulation from management.
Furthermore
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, all revenue is on you, the most important is you can manage your profit.
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, someone who has
property
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a property
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business
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 and can
sale
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sell
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 his/her property without
third
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a third
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 party,
it
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apply
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means all
benefit
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benefits
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 will be hers/his. Despite there
are
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being
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 advantages, it's undeniable that
this
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self-employee
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bring
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brings
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 some consequences,
such
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 as
,
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apply
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 lost profit. it's
obiously
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obviously
 clear that
have
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having
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 your own
business
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 is not as easy as you imagined. When
plan
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the plan
a plan
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 is not working as we expected and
lead
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leads
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 to
broke
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broken
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 profit, someone could
loose
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lose
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 their
ownself
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apply
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alone. The other
things
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thing
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 that should be
encounter
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encountered
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 is how to
managed
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manage
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business
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a business
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 by yourself. Running a
business
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 means you have sufficient ability in a
business
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 from operation, marketing, financial, and management.
For instance
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, knowing all parts
in
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of
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 a
business
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lead
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leads
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 to a successful
business
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.
To conclude
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, running a
business
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 or
to be
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being
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self-employee
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a self-employee
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have
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has
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 many drawbacks,
such
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possibility
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the possibility
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to lose
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of losing
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 profits and
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business
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the business
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 ability required.

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task achievement
Clarify the main argument in the introduction to provide a clear overview of the essay's purpose.
task achievement
Give more specific examples to support your points, ensuring they directly relate to the advantages and disadvantages discussed.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of ideas by linking paragraphs and sentences more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Use more transitional phrases to enhance the connection between points.
grammar vocabulary
Avoid grammatical errors and ensure subject-verb agreement is consistent throughout the essay.
task achievement
The essay covers both advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed, addressing the task prompt effectively.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, providing a basic structure to the essay.
task achievement
Attempts to provide examples is a good approach to support the main ideas, even if the examples need to be more detailed.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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