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Advanges of using technology in classroom in schools for students and teachers

#advanges #technology #classroom #schools #students #teachers
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The impact of
technology
 on schools has been quite significant.
This
 widespread adoption of
technology
 has completely changed how teachers teach and
students
 learn. Teachers are learning how to adapt to emerging technologies
while
students
 are using advanced
technology
 to enhance their learning experience
therefore
technology
 gives great benefits for
students
 and teachers .
Firstly
,
technology
gives
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 great sources
for
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any
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information in very short periods of time .It helps
students
 to become self-learners by encouraging them to search for
information
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the information
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 they need
also
 it allows educators
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present their lessons to
students
 in different styles which
make
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makes
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 learning easier and less stressful.
Other
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 benefit of
technology
 is it prepares
students
 for
thire
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their
 careers life in future which very
essential
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 skill to learn to face challenges and navigate
in
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their way through college and their future careers.
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coherence cohesion
Consider structuring your essay with clear paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Make sure to provide specific examples in support of each point to strengthen your task achievement.
coherence cohesion
Aim for a strong conclusion to reiterate the main points and close your argument effectively.
task achievement
The essay clearly outlines the advantages of technology for both teachers and students, which is an important aspect of the task.
task achievement
You have used some specific points like preparing students for future careers and presenting lessons in different styles.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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