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The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart
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number
price
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prices
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 per kilometre of
cloths
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cloth
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 in the European
union
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Union
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 from 1997 to 2003 .
Overall
, as Can be
seen
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 that
significant
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a significant
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trand
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trend
 in Argentine .
whil
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while
, in Bangladesh was Lewest
figer
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finger
.
However
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 Brazil had
same
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number
 in both years.
It is clear that
,
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 In 1993 Argentina had a higher
Price
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price
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 of
prodeuct
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products
 nearly 38.
Whil
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, in
Bangladesh
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Bangladesh,
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 wear Loess
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number
 of
price
 were around 4.
However
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 in
the
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apply
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1993 and 2003 had
same
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the same
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price
 24 in Brazil.
In addition
 from Japan to
india
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India
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were fall
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fell
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 sharply from 15 to 6 figure.
on the other hand
, In 2003 Argentina were
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a signaficant
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signaficant
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significant
number
more
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 than 25. Whil
thir
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their
were reduce
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were reduced
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trand
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trend
 in Bangladesh nearly 6
price
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prices
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.
Moreover
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thir
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their
were fluctuate
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 from Jaban to
india
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India
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.
In
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Jaban
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Japan
 and
india
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India
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 had
similarty
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similarity
similar
price
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prices
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 from 14 to 13.
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in
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China had increased to 16
number
.
Furthermore
 in Brazil
were
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there were
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similarly
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similar
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price
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prices
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 in both years 23.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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