Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays an enormous number of people from all over the world use
plastic
shopping
bags
in their daily
life
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. At the same
time
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time,
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there are opponents of
plastic
bags
usage because of their detrimental impact on the
environment
. I totally agree with the point of view that
plastic
shopping
bags
should be forbidden.
Firstly
,
plastic
decomposition is a very
time consuming
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process, which takes millions of years before a tiny
plastic
item completely decays.
Moreover
, during
this
process
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process,
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many harmful substances
release
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and poison the soil or water. That in turn leads to
extinction
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the extinction
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of animal and plant species or to their mutations, influencing people's health in the end.
For instance
, eating food cultivated in the
plastic
polluted
area
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areas
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may cause serious diseases like cancer.
Secondly
, not only the
plastic
decomposition destructively
affects
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the
environment
, but
also
plastic
bags
itself. Some animals confuse these
bags
with something esculent and
then
die suffering from terrible pain. Marine turtles,
for example
, die of suffocation caused by wrapping
the
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plastic
bag
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bags
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around
the
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neck
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.
In addition
, taking into consideration that an immense number of people use
plastic
shopping
bags
once and
then
just throw them away in the
environment
, the consequences of
this
are extensive. The bottom line is that
plastic
bags
pollute the
environment
and cause wild animal extinction. In my opinion, they must be banned in order to protect the Earth and its living beings.
In addition
, measures should be taken to
straggle
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people’s neglect of nature.
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task achievement
To achieve a more comprehensive response, consider including a counterargument to demonstrate the broader perspective on this topic.
coherence and cohesion
For improved coherence, ensure smooth transitions between some arguments and explanations. This can help in maintaining the flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear and strong position on banning plastic bags, consistent throughout with logical reasoning.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are well-crafted, offering a clear stance and effectively summarizing the main points.
task achievement
The essay effectively uses specific examples, such as the impact on marine life, which strengthens the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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