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The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.

The graph below shows the average time spent by four car manufacturers to produce vehicles at their US factories.
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The provided graph gives information about
amount
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 of the time which was spent by car
manufactures
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manufacturers
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 to produce vehicles at USA factories over a seven-year period between 1998 and 2005.
Namely general
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Namely General Motors
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motor
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,
ford
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Ford
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,
Toyota
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,
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honda
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and honda
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.
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, it is obviously seen that the analyzed period average
hours
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 to produce cars four car manufactures were significant decrease. Getting back to the details in 1998
general
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General Motor
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motor
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was
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spent 32
hours
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 per vehicle,
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 the other
manufactures
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manufacturers
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were
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spent less time, than
general
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General Motor
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motor
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. General
motor
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 dropped considerably before 2001 and reached 27
hours
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,
whereas
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hours
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 per vehicle of
ford
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Ford
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 were a negligible increase and reached 31
hours
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 in 2001. Meanwhile, in 1998 the indicator of
Toyota
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 and
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honda
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Honda
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 was 22
hours
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.
Toyota
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manufacture
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manufacturing
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 increased slightly in 1999
then
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 fell back to
the
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22
hours
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 in 2001,
by contrast
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 for
this
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 period factory
of
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honda
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 was
marginable
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marginal
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then
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 got to back
22
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hours
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 as same as
Toyota
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. By 2005 general
motor
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 and
ford
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Ford
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 decreased steadily. The fraction was 22 and 23
hours
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 respectively. Manufactures of
Toyota
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 and
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honda
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Honda
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 were fluctuation and reached 21
hours
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 by 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words motor, toyota, honda, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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