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The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.
#percentage #australian #exports #four #countries
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many
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percentage
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which
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apply
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was exported from Australia to other countries over a
twelve- year
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twelve-year
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period
 between 1990 and 2012. Namely
Japan
,
USA
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the USA
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,
China
 and India.
Overall
, It is obviously seen that
the
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analyzed
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apply
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period
 the
percentage
 of Australian exports to
China
was dramatic
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dramatically
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increase
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increased
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,
while
 the other two countries dropped significantly. Getting back to the details at the beginning of the
period
 the most popular
county
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country
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 to export
of
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products
was
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Japan
,
by contrast
 end of the year it was
China
. In 1990 the
percentage
 of
Japan
 was 25%,
then
this
 fraction decreased slightly and reached 18% by 2012,
whereas
 the lowest
percentage
 of
China
 rose gradually by 2000,
then
 increased rapidly in 2012. The
percentage
 of USA was negligible rise as same as
Japan
 and reached 5%. During the
period
 the
percentage
 of India did not change
practical
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. At the beginning of the
period
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period,
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 the indicator was approximately 3%, by 2007
this
 indicator fluctuated
reached
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and reached
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peak
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a peak
the peak
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at
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of
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 7% in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, period, japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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