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Many people used distance- learning programs to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefits as much as attending college or university. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #distance- #programs #study #home #college #university
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 of
internet
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. One of the things that
also
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 it is
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beneficial
 or not, based on arguments and different reasons. To start with, we have to consider why distance- learning became a thing in the first place. Actually, it started to be publicly used when universities began to offer it to
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students
 with
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limited
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access
 to educational facilities and transportation, making them able to study as if they were in that place physically.
This
, for sure counts as a
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benefit
 and it helped many
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programmes
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 by Europe.
Although
, using technology to learn from far away could
also
 be helpful when a pandemic like COVID-19
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decides
 to put a stop to all human activities. In detail, if it was not because of
this
 tool, many students would get to critical points all across the globe.
On the other hand
, there are many arguments that mostly focus
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 disadvantages of
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 learning. It is mostly said that
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this
 method of education is not as sufficient when compared to being physically present at the class. In fact,
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 right claim as
sudents
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students
 often would not have enough participation and focus on lectures, which is mostly because the individual is
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 his comfort zone and is not placed
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 the
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classes
class's
 atmosphere. Actually,
this
 effect can be seen in
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students
 grade drops in COVID pandemic. But, in my
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this
 method did not mean to replace physical classes but was rather
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meant
 to be a help. In conclusion, distance- learning helped many students in
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different
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 it was during the pandemic or in cases with low
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accessibility
 to educational services. But, it would remain as a help and can not
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completely
 replace on campus
studing
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studying
 at least in present time.
Submitted by Taha Sol. on

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task achievement
Try to add more specific examples or references to real-world scenarios to strengthen your argument.
clear comprehensive ideas
Aim to clarify some ideas more thoroughly to ensure they are as comprehensive as possible.
language accuracy
Work on grammar and spelling to minimize errors, enhancing overall clarity and professionalism.
introduction
The essay begins with a strong introduction, setting the stage for the argument.
task response
The benefits and drawbacks of distance learning are clearly discussed.
conclusion
The conclusion effectively summarizes the essay's main points.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • self-paced learning
  • cost-effective
  • commuting costs
  • tuition fees
  • face-to-face interaction
  • networking
  • self-motivation
  • discipline
  • structured environment
  • extensive resources
  • laboratories
  • counseling services
  • distance-learning programs
  • traditional classes
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