The best way for the government to solve the traffic congestion problems in cities is to provide free bus service 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Concerns about traffic congestion have led to calls for the government to run public transportation,
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as buses, around the clock and free of charge. I partly agree with
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idea.
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it reduces private car use, a system of lower fares would be a better option for sustainable development in the long run. First and foremost,
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development reduces the tendency to use private cars. When
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services are always available, people may prefer to use them because they are more convenient and affordable.
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roads less congested, as private cars are one of the main contributors to traffic congestion. In Jakarta,
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, private cars account for almost half of the vehicles on the road during commuting hours.
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, they should spend more time travelling,
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commuting by
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is less time-consuming.
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, offering free
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services to all passengers could result in long-term operational difficulties.
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is mostly because it relies heavily on limited government subsidies, despite the ongoing need to fund
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operations and staff salaries.
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, the Suroboyo
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, which
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offered free rides, only survived for two years
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a lack of maintenance costs.
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, the operator had to introduce small fares for passengers, except for pregnant women, elderly people, and those with disability.
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change allows them to continue operating.
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, providing a completely free service appears unrealistic, especially for 24-hour operations. In conclusion, the availability of non-stop
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services indeed helps to reduce traffic congestion problems.
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, making fares free is unrealistic and increases the risk of long-term operational disruptions.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • public transport
  • urban areas
  • carbon emissions
  • commuters
  • sustainable funding
  • infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • environmentally friendly
  • accessibility
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