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The pie charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.

The pie charts and the table show the primary sources and the total amount of fish that transported into United States in the year 1988 to 2000.
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The pie charts show the percentages
about
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of
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 the source of
fish
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 imported to the United States in 1988,1992, and 2000, and the table compares the total value of
fish
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 in the three years.
Overall
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, it is clear from the table that the total value of
fish
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 imported showed an upward trend from 1988 to 2000, and it can be seen from the pie charts that the percentage of
fish
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 imported from Canada decreased during
this
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 period. Looking at the information in more detail, we can see that the total value of
fish
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 imported to the US grew from 6.57
billion
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dollars
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 in 1988, rose by around 1
billion
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dollars
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 to 8.52
billion
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dollars
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 in 1992, and reached 10.72
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000, marking significant growth. The pie charts
shows
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 that the percentage of
fish
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 imported from Canada decreased from 60% in 1988 to 28% in 2000. Meanwhile, the proportion of
the
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fish
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 imported from other countries rose from 27% in 1988, peaking at 46% in 1992, before falling slightly to 42% in 2000.
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, the amount of
fish
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 from China stood at 13%, which was the lowest that year, but it rose to 30% in 2000, surpassing
Canada'
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Canada's
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • primary sources
  • import
  • export
  • sustainable
  • trade
  • volume
  • shifts
  • increase
  • decrease
  • prominent
  • exporters
  • fishery
  • market dynamics
  • trade agreements
  • conservation
  • supply chain
  • trend analysis
  • economic impact
  • fishing industry
  • environmental concerns
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