You are not happy with the course you are doing at collage and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the collage director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: •what course are you doing now •why you are not satisfied with that course •what course you would like to change

#course #collage #change #director #•what #•why

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Dear Mr John Smith, The purpose of writing

this

letter to you is to alter my current to another one which is available at your college. In the first

place

Add a comma

place,

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I have to mention that I am Omadi who has been studying in your college for 2 months in terms of

computer

science

. Admittedly,

this

field is quite interesting and supports not only learning the

overall

computer

system but

also

finding necessary information fast and effectively on Internet platforms,

such

as Google, Chrome, and YouTube.

However

, if I don't know the

English

language fully, I can not learn deeply

this

field because the

computer

system is connected to

English

words.

Therefore

, I am unable to master a

computer

science

course without the

English

language. Coming to the request, I want to take part in

English

classes which are available in your college

instead

computer

science

. As soon as I have learnt

English

, I will start to participate in

computer

science

courses which is a more important subject for my future job. Hoping that you will accept my request and comprehend it clearly, I will wait for your reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Omadi Yuldashev

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task response

Include specific reasons why you wish to change courses to strengthen your request.

coherence cohesion

To improve coherence, ensure each paragraph clearly centers around a single idea.

task response

The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, suitable for a formal request.

coherence cohesion

The letter is generally well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.

7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

196 words

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