You are not happy with the course you are doing at collage and would like to change to a different course. Write a letter to the collage director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: •what course are you doing now •why you are not satisfied with that course •what course you would like to change

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Dear Mr John Smith, The purpose of writing

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letter to you is to alter my current to another one which is available at your college. In the first

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I have to mention that I am Omadi who has been studying in your college for 2 months in terms of

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science

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. Admittedly,

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field is quite interesting and supports not only learning the

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system but

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finding necessary information fast and effectively on Internet platforms,

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as Google, Chrome, and YouTube.

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, if I don't know the

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language fully, I can not learn deeply

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field because the

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system is connected to

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words.

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, I am unable to master a

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course without the

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language. Coming to the request, I want to take part in

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classes which are available in your college

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science

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. As soon as I have learnt

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, I will start to participate in

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courses which is a more important subject for my future job. Hoping that you will accept my request and comprehend it clearly, I will wait for your reply at your earliest convenience. Yours sincerely, Omadi Yuldashev

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Include specific reasons why you wish to change courses to strengthen your request.

coherence cohesion

To improve coherence, ensure each paragraph clearly centers around a single idea.

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The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, suitable for a formal request.

coherence cohesion

The letter is generally well-structured with a clear introduction and conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

196 words

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