You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
Whilst the
governments
believe the economy
is very important because they depend on it very much, people
think the other types of progress are equal to money so they can get their rights properly.
On the one hand, most of
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apply
the
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apply
governments
focus on economy
because it's the most important part Correct article usage
the economy
in
the Change preposition
of
country
and they can't acheive
their goals if they didn't be successful Correct your spelling
achieve
on
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in
economy
part. If the Add an article
the economy
an economy
governments
look to make the people
happy they need to spend on them by giving them a good salary and that can't be happened
if the Change to the active voice
happen
have happened
government
economy
in
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is in
terrible
situation. Most Add an article
a terrible
of
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apply
governments
depend on the economy
to measure their success; therefore
, they can give a proper salaries
to the workers and employees and that for them is the most important thing. Correct the article-noun agreement
a proper salary
proper salaries
UK
is the best example when the Correct article usage
The UK
government
decide
to increase the salary by 10% because the Wrong verb form
decided
country
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country's
economy
was very strong and the government
was satisfied with that.
On the other hand
, As economy
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the economy
important
for the Add a missing verb
is important
government
people
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are warried
warried
about Correct your spelling
worried
the
other things There Correct article usage
apply
is
a lot of things important Correct subject-verb agreement
are
such
as medication in their own country
, people
would like to have a good facility for their midication
, it's not only about money and Correct your spelling
medication
economy
. What is the Correct article usage
the economy
benifit
if the Correct your spelling
benefit
government
successed
and Correct your spelling
succeeded
focused
Wrong verb form
focuses
in
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on
economy
and dismiss the Add an article
the economy
midication
, they're worried about their medicines in the future and how they will be treated in their Correct your spelling
medication
country
. Japan
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Japan's
economy
is very strong, but unfortunately
the Add a comma
unfortunately,
midication
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medication
thier
is in Correct your spelling
there
terrible
situation.
In conclusion, I believe Add an article
a terrible
people
has
the right to ask the Change the verb form
have
governments
to make the other parts of the country
equal to economy
part of it, the Correct article usage
the economy
economy
not
only the important thing in the Add a missing verb
is not
country
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general
Clarify and expand on each main idea with specific examples and detailed explanations. For instance, further details on why governments prioritize economic growth or examples of other key types of progress would strengthen the argument.
coherence cohesion
Enhance coherence by ensuring each paragraph flows logically to the next. You could improve transitions between the introduction, body, and conclusion sections.
language and mechanics
Check for grammar and vocabulary mistakes, especially with words like 'medication' and 'worried.' Although small inaccuracies don’t hugely affect the grade, minimizing them will enhance clarity and professionalism.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which helps in organizing the argument.
task achievement
You cover both viewpoints as required by the task, showcasing an understanding of the topic.
evidence support
Including specific examples like the UK’s salary increase ties your points to real-world instances, strengthening your argument.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.