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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries.
The line graph shows
the
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information
of
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on
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an
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Australia
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Australian
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 exports to four different nations, indicated as
a
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percentages between 1990
to
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and
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 2012.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that the Australian export figures to developed countries, namely,
Japan
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 and
United
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the United
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state
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, were on
its
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their
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 downfall,
whereas
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 that of the other two experienced a
growing
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growth
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 at
different
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a different
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 rate.
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 with, a closer look at the line graph in 1990 reported that at approximately 26%
Japan
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 accounted for the largest export percentages among all aforementioned nations, followed by the US at 12%, and the remaining two:
China
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 and India, at less than 5%. During 1990-2000,
while
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China
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graudually
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gradually
 rose to 5%, the
exports'
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exports
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 figure in
Japan
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 plummeted to roughly about 18%. On
one
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the one
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 hand, the percentages of goods exported to America
were fluctuate
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 with minimal falling and rising before reaching the same figures in 2000, that of India
were remained
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remained
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 stable. From 2000 onwards,
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China
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China's
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 exports encountered
with
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exponential growth which eventually reached its peak at about 28% in 2012 but
Japan
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 slowly fell to 16%. Surprisingly, India export's trend seems to project
and
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an
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overtaking
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 that of
China
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 in 2010 at
3
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a 3
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%
different
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, it eventually outnumbered by
China
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at
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6% in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • exports
  • timeline
  • analyze
  • significant increase/decrease
  • trade relationships
  • economic dependencies
  • stability
  • fluctuation
  • political events
  • Country A/B/C/D
  • trends
  • insights
  • compare/comparison
  • examine
  • reveal
  • indicate
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