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Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. You should write at least 150 words.

Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar charts
compares
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 the
number
 of the different kinds of vehicles used to travel to and from work in one European city from 1960
tot0
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to
 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
 of
people
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who drove
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drove
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drive
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 cars is
highest
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the highest
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 and
people
 went
onby
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on
 foot stood
second
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the second
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 location.
Also
, all the vehicles fluctuated during the period shown. In 1980, the
number
 of
people
catched
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caught
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buses increased slightly,with around 30 and that of
people
 who drove cars rose sharply,
at
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to
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 25. Meanwhile, the figure for
population
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the population
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 dove bikes marginally dropped, at around 25
while
 that of the population
went
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apply
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by foot increased before experiencing a drop to above 15. Over 20 years later, the figure for
people
catched
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caught
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 buses went down,
with
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to
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 above 15 and that
of
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for
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people
 who drove cars reached a peak
to
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of
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 above 35. The
number
 of inhabitants who rode bikes significantly declined,
at
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to
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 around 10 and that of
people
 who went by foot decreased slightly, with 10.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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