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Some people believe that teachers have an important role to play in the educational success, while others think it is the students' attitude that matters. Discuss both of views and share your opinion.

#people #teachers #role #success #students #attitude #matters
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Some
people
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 argue that
teachers
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 play a vital role
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 a
student in
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educational success ,
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 others believe that it depends totally on
students
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 themselves. I,
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, with the former view. In
this
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 essay, I will give my reasons. On the one hand,
people
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 who say that
teachers
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 should provide all necessary materials and
information
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 to
students
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 to succeed in the course think that
teachers
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 are considered guides to
students
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 and without someone to teach them they will not get attention
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 they studying. In other
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 not all
students
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at
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 the same level of understanding and receive the
information
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 so it is very crucial to receive
information
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 from the teacher. A prime example of
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 is that my sister has a mental issue and she does not understand immediately the
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 so she can not study alone.
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,
teachers
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 have great work in teaching
students
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that
students
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 should depend on alone
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 they study they think because of technology and artificial intelligence they can search for and solve their problems fast.
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, my brother his teacher never came to class and they suffered
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 of the course so because of that he believed in himself and browsed
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 from GTPchat, Wikipedia, and the internet.
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,
this
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 brings many benefits for
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 because he/she will not rely on
teachers
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 and they will be more confident in themselves. In conclusion, some
people
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 say that
students
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 should be self-studies,
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 others say that
teachers
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 play a significant role in teaching
students
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. I believe that without a teacher
students
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 will be distracted and stressed.
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