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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The supplied map illustrates a small city centre which is called Islip at the present
,
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 and the future schedules for it. A glance at the map reveals that the whole area will witness a lot of various urbanizations and developments in the future. Based on the planned development, the whole Islip is going to be surrounded by a main road which has
dual
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 carriageway, except
of
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 school and housing.
Moreover
, there are two large shops at the top and below
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the main road, which will be demolished and replaced by new parts,
such
 as
bus
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 station, shopping centre, car park and new housing in the north of the Islip.
In addition
, there is a huge area for housing in the middle of the town which is going to be removed and turned into shops and pedestrians only region. Another striking construction is the erection of the new housing in the below of the shops
areain
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area in
are in
 the future.
Furthermore
, there is an enormous park in the east of the town right now, which will be shrunk next to the new housing region
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some years later. It is interesting to note that the housing part and school are going to
be remained
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 unchanged
according to
 the planned development.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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