The diagram shows the first industrial process for making dough. Write your essay in 150 words.

The diagram shows the first industrial process for making dough. Write your essay in 150 words.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of
dough
making, which involves three important stages, including the pre-
production
,
production
, and
post –
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post–production
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production
stage
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stages
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.
First,
in the
pre
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pre-production
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production
stage
, the three main ingredients
such
as water, flour, and yeast are poured into the industrial mixer in order to be mixed evenly.
Then
, the mixed
dough
will be stored in a glass box, and some additives will be added to ferment the
dough
. After being fermented, the
dough
is moved into a divider machine and
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cut into several pieces. It
then
falls eventually into a plunger machine and
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is
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pushed
to
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into
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a rotating
cylinder
. When the
dough
is pushed by the plunger machine, an irregular round shape is created and it
was
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is
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taken by the rotating
cylinder
.
Finally
, the rotating
cylinder
then
forward
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the
dough
into the conveyor belt to go to the next
process
.
To conclude
, the
process
of bread
dough
making is quite simple
that
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is capital intensive. The
process
is started
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with the pre-
production
stage
where the
dough
are
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mixed. After the pre-
production
stage
is the
production
stage
where the
dough
are
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is
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fermented,
being
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cut into pieces, and shaped.
Then
, the
last
stage
is the
post
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post-production
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production
test where the
dough
is moved to the rotating
cylinder
and conveyor belt.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, dough, production, stage, cylinder with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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