The diagram shows the first industrial process for making dough. Write your essay in 150 words.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of dough
making, which involves three important stages, including the pre-production
, production
, and post –
Correct your spelling
post–production
production
stage
.
Fix the agreement mistake
stages
First,
in the pre
Add a hyphen
pre-production
production
stage
, the three main ingredients such
as water, flour, and yeast are poured into the industrial mixer in order to be mixed evenly. Then
, the mixed dough
will be stored in a glass box, and some additives will be added to ferment the dough
. After being fermented, the dough
is moved into a divider machine and being
cut into several pieces. It Unnecessary verb
apply
then
falls eventually into a plunger machine and being
pushed Wrong verb form
is
to
a rotating Change preposition
into
cylinder
. When the dough
is pushed by the plunger machine, an irregular round shape is created and it was
taken by the rotating Wrong verb form
is
cylinder
. Finally
, the rotating cylinder
then
forward
the Change the verb form
forwards
dough
into the conveyor belt to go to the next process
.
To conclude
, the process
of bread dough
making is quite simple that
is capital intensive. The Correct word choice
and
process
is started
with the pre-Wrong verb form
starts
production
stage
where the dough
are
mixed. After the pre-Change the verb form
is
production
stage
is the production
stage
where the dough
are
fermented, Change the verb form
is
being
cut into pieces, and shaped. Unnecessary verb
apply
Then
, the last
stage
is the post
Add a hyphen
post-production
production
test where the dough
is moved to the rotating cylinder
and conveyor belt.Submitted by riani.the2 on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, dough, production, stage, cylinder with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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