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n the last decade, there has been a great increase in global air travel. What do you think are the reasons for this and do you think it is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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In the past years, many
contenent
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continents
 have been connected through planes. People now can
travel
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 easily to visit and explore places in just
few
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a few
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 hours. The causes behind
this
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 development are to
rise
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raise
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 the economics of the
countries
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 and connect individuals with each
others
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.
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, in my opinion, it is great because it brings a lot of benefits
for
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 governments and families.
Firstly
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, many
countries
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 around the world have been growing economically since
the
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apply
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global
air
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travel
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becomes
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has become
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 reliable and affordable.
For example
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, Thailand had a huge increase in tourist numbers in 2015
due to
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 many
airplane
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aeroplane
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 companies
bring
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 travellers who want to explore the country.
Therefore
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, the government announced that their income has
rose
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 because of
this
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 issue.
In addition
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, many
countries
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such
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 as the UK make application for
Visa
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a Visa
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 simpler for people from the
middle east
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Middle East
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 in order to have more visits in the future.
Secondly
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, students can
travel
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 and study abroad
easliy
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easily
 in another country nowadays.
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, students can attend lectures at university and have dinner with their parents
at
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on
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 the same day.
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 of
this
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, many families send their children to complete their education
globaly
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globally
.
Moreover
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,
the
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apply
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air
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 shipping has
grow
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ultimetly
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ultimately
 in the past decade. people could send their stuff and be delivered in the next day.
To sum up
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,
although
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 many
countries
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 have strict policies and rules in regard to global
air
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travel
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, they get many advantages from the improvement of
this
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 sector. It is predictable that global
air
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 travelling will
stil
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still
 grow in the next periods.

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introduction conclusion
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relevant specific examples
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clear comprehensive ideas
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task achievement
The essay provides a clear response to the task, addressing both reasons for the increase in air travel and its benefits.
coherence cohesion
Logical structure is maintained well, with paragraphs focusing on different aspects (economic benefits, student mobility, and family connections).
supported main points
The essay effectively uses examples, such as the increase in tourism in Thailand due to air travel, to support the main points, though they could be more detailed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global air travel
  • technological advancements
  • affordable airfares
  • globalization
  • international trade
  • commerce
  • interconnectedness
  • business trips
  • surge in tourism
  • disposable incomes
  • explore new countries
  • cost-efficiency
  • convenience
  • international students
  • expatriates
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • sustainability goals
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