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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The diagram shows a
town
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 of 65,000 people called
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Garlsdon
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Carlson
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as well as
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illustrating
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 two potential locations for a new
supermarket
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 in
this
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town
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.
Overall
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, what sets the first location, S1, apart from the
second,
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S2, is that the former is in the countryside, on the outskirts of
Garlsdon
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,
whereas
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 the latter occupies a more urban and central position in
Garlsdon
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. Looking first at S1, if the
supermarket
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 were placed here, it would be positioned in/to the northwest of
Garlsdon
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 in the countryside.
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, it would be flanked by the railway and the main road to Hindon, a
town
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 12 km away with a population of 10,000. If built on the S2 site,
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, the
supermarket
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 would be to the north of the southern industrial area and to the south of the railway. The
supermarket
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 would be situated within the pedestrianized
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center
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, which is surrounded by the housing area. To the west and east of the
supermarket
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 would be the roads leading to Bransdon and Cransdon, respectively, with the former being 16 km southwest and holding 15,000 residents,
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 the latter is 25 km southeast and is home to 29,000 inhabitants.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, garlsdon, supermarket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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