The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
The diagram shows a
town
of 65,000 people called
Garlsdon
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Carlson
,
as well as
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illustrates
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two potential locations for a new
supermarket
in
this
town
.
Overall
, what sets the first location, S1, apart from the
second,
S2, is that the former is in the countryside, on the outskirts of
Garlsdon
,
whereas
the latter occupies a more urban and central position in
Garlsdon
. Looking first at S1, if the
supermarket
were placed here, it would be positioned in/to the northwest of
Garlsdon
in the countryside.
Also
, it would be flanked by the railway and the main road to Hindon, a
town
12 km away with a population of 10,000. If built on the S2 site,
however
, the
supermarket
would be to the north of the southern industrial area and to the south of the railway. The
supermarket
would be situated within the pedestrianized
town
center
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, which is surrounded by the housing area. To the west and east of the
supermarket
would be the roads leading to Bransdon and Cransdon, respectively, with the former being 16 km southwest and holding 15,000 residents,
while
the latter is 25 km southeast and is home to 29,000 inhabitants.
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  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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