Some people think that it is more important to plant more trees in open area in towns and cities than build more housing. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that some
people
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think that it is more important to plant more
trees
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in open spaces in town and society than build more housing.
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it is a commonly held
believe
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that planting
trees
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in areas
more
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important than building houses, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my
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opinion
opinon
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this
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statement.
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with,
plant
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trees
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is something helpful for the global and
people
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on the earth.
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, whenever we plant more
trees
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we will get clear air and
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the temperature
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will be reduced.
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,
trees
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can produce Oxygen and
this
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gas
very
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important for human beings.
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, when you visit any forest you will find
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a clear
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and clean atmosphere that you will not find
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in any other place. Another point to consider, building homes for
people
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is something necessary more than
any thing
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anything
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else.
It
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also
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possible to say that,
people
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can not live without
accomodation
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accommodation
to use.
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, imagine if we do not focus on
homes
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home
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numbers,
people
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will get mad and that something no one
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it
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apply
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.
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, the government of the UK spent
last
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year a lot of money to plan
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, it
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better if they
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that money on homes
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. In conclusion, despite
people
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having different views, I believe helping human
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beings
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than other things.
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task achievement
Consider enhancing the clarity of your argument by making sure each paragraph supports your overall standpoint. Currently, the essay indicates disagreement with the prompt in the introduction but does not reinforce this stance strongly enough throughout.
task achievement
Develop your paragraphs more fully to ensure that your main points are well-supported with examples and evidence. This will enhance the clarity and depth of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next, maintaining a logical flow throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Review the interaction between concepts within each paragraph to ensure coherence. Some ideas seem disjointed or underdeveloped, affecting the seamless flow of arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes both an introduction and a conclusion, framing the argument nicely.
task achievement
You have considered multiple perspectives on the issue, such as the importance of planting trees for the environment and the necessity of housing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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