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The graph below gives information on the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia, for the period 2000 to 2020.

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The chart illustrates key information about many
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 doing 5 different activities at a social centre in Melbourne City, Australia, At various times.
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, it is clear from the graph that the film club is taking the majority of people's activity. And the
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 of
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 who are applying for the amateur dramatics event is the lowest
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the table tennis activity grew significantly to 55
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 in 2020 and reached its peak After it was 28
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 in the year 2000.
On the other hand
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, the
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 of
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 has reduced to 6
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 in the amateur dramatics activity in the year 2020, After it was 25
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 in the time of 2000. In terms of musical performance events, it grew from 0 in 2000 to about 28
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 in 2020; it showed massive change after it was only 0
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.
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, the martial arts event did not show increasing in the period of time,
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, it grew slightly in the year 2010; after that, the event went back to the same
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 of 48
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 at all times.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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