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The line graph compares the percentage of people in three countries who used the Internet between 1999 and 2009.

The line graph compares the percentage of people in three countries who used the Internet between 1999 and 2009.
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The given line graph illustrates the proportion of
internet
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Internet
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is
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apply
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used
of
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by
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 inhabitants in three different
nation
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nations
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 between 1999 and 2009 From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that the trend of USA, Canada,
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Mexico
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and Mexico
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is go
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is going
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 up, and the percentages of Canada
has
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have
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 the best growth rate, other hand
Mexico
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 has the lowest growth rate. Commencing with the year 1999 ,the data on interconnections in USA was the highest , at 25. The information for Canada was lower, at 10. Internet users manufacturing in
Mexico
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 ,
however
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, accounted
fror
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for
 the lowest value, at 5. In the following years, by 2005 ,
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Mexico
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Mexico's
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 web users increased to 28 before reaching 39 in 2009. In common the United States network rose sharply to 70 and
peak
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peaked
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 at 80 in 2009. At the same time,
Canadian
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the Canadian
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 connection rocket climbed to 70 and hit the highest at 100 , making it
top
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the top
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users
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user
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at the end
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 of
time
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the time
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 frame.
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