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The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and graph below give information about participants who have entered the Olympics since it began. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The both
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graph
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graphs
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 illustrate the proportion of participants, entering the
Olympic
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Olympics
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 from 1924 to 2012.
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, the bar chart displays the ratio of men and
women
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, which was higher than
women
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 each
year
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. The line graph depicts
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 increase in the
number
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 of participants.
The
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 first
year
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, the
number
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 of men
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 around 3000. Between 1924 and 1952, it rose significantly and stayed at about 4500. Afterwards, it grows swiftly over the
year
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.
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 of the period, it remained under 6000.
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, the
number
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 of
women
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 made up at around 100, in the first
year
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. Until 1924, the ratio of
women
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 rose minimally, which stayed under 1000 in 1952.
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 1984 to 2012, the proportion of
female
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females
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grows
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 significantly, which remained below 5000 in 2012. At the
begining
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beginning
 of the period, the
number
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 of
participations
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participants
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 stood at about 3000. Between 1924 and 1984, it increased sharply each
year
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, which stayed above 6000 in 1984. From 1984 to 2012, it rose twice from
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year
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.
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 final
year
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, it remained
roughly
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 11000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, year, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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